I'm the curious cat that sometimes says too much, but I find I learn by asking and learn from everyone so I appreciate you sharing!

Now that I've seen the color version I see what distracted me from the original. For me, and understand I say this on purpose, I find black and whites best with extreme tonal values and less visuals. While your image is good then, I find it too middle grey with too many distractions and as such like the color version more!

It's a hard call, and ultimately only you know what's best, but I hope it helps and thank you again for joining us! S-

Welcome and thank you for a great shot. If you tick the box that says Allow storage others can download your pictures and try various software tricks to get the result you want.
Without download I would say Nik Color Efex Detail Extract would be a good starting point. Can produce noise in the image as well so may need noise reduction afterwards.
You BW would respond wonderfully well to the colour image being processed in the Nik BW converter which is Silver Efex. Will give you all the detail you require. Your conversion has left it a little flat. looks like a LR conversion job? No I do not work for Nik but no snapper is complete without it in their arsenal in my humble but well considered opinion.
Have a great day.