I am sadden to read such nasty comments on this young Lady. I am a photographer. I have photographed many young girls and boys, men, and women with Tattoos.
Pictures need some really good editing. Lighting looks good. You do need to make sure that your subjects eyes are in focus. make sure your cropping properly. Watch out for to much background and where you are cropping. Remove distracting stuff in the picture. etc
you've done a wonderful job on your first live shoot. Practice makes perfect. keep shooting. I sure hope to see more images of yours. Happy holidays Kimberly

Kimberly

I didn't miss it. But using that excuse will elicit the reply, "So you knew the [lighting/model/location/etc] was not optimum and you took the images anyway? So I'm supposed to judge your images on the same scale as this other artist who took pains to make sure everything was optimum?" In other words, there's no quarter asked, no quarter given.

As I neared retirement, many new photographers would ask me to critique their images. I always asked, "Do you want to improve or do you want me to make you feel warm and fuzzy?"

A bunch of idiots thought that negatively commenting on your model's tattoos was a bright idea. No one with a brain gives a rat's patootie about what their opinion is. They're morons one and all and they did you a total disservice.
What you attempted to do, I've been doing for many years. Some of my models have dozens of tatts, some have none at all. I'm interested in three things: 1: Can they flow from one pose to another or do I have to coach them? 2: What do they look like? 3: Can they show up on time. (I should have put that first.)

The natural light from the window is a great diffuse source. However, it has to be mixed with some type of electronic flash or continuous light source. The model's face is underexposed from a lack of fill, but the window light is too harsh.

You can see a lot of irregularities in her skin, which aren't flattering, maybe owing to her young age. They need attention in post processing.

You should read some literature on lighting ratios. For the most part they're way too high, yielding very unpleasing contrasts.

The non-subject lighting is irregular, with a lot of over/under exposure in various areas, and it needs to be handled properly to achieve the best results.

I don't know what your intents were, for the B&W shot, but the long tapering background has too many distractions along the walls. Her right arm doesn't seem posed correctly. It looks like she's trying to rest her arm on the cage, but missed it.

The tattoos are very distracting. The stool shot highlights them, but to what end? Are the tats the subject? They dominate, and the model is lost. The upper torso tat, as well as the one on her thigh, are overpowering the shots. You're looking for glamour, but the poses and lighting really work against it.