Telling a story: I put the photos together in order to tell a story and I would appreciate comments on the story aspect, the image as if it were a photo, and finally the Post...

Howard5252 Loc: New York / Florida (now)

I put the photos together in order to tell a story and I would appreciate comments on the story aspect, the image as if it were a photo, and finally the Post Processing. I already know the bird's neck could use some improvement, unfortunately I cannot find the original photos.

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A story I don't get, if you mean a narrative.
Thaz not a flaw. I can watch the interesting
action and visuals in a movie while ignoring
the story. IOW story is just not my thing.

As a photograph it's got simplicity and some
sense of something about to happen. But the
aesthetics are little raggedy ... the colors and
densities. The framing and PoV really make it.

As for post, I think thaz redundant with "as a
photo" ... kinda raggedy in the colors and the
densities.

Acoarst, it's a refreshing break from flowers,
bugs, and soaring eagles !

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Stephan G

Howard5252 wrote:

I put the photos together in order to tell a story and I would appreciate comments on the story aspect, the image as if it were a photo, and finally the Post Processing. I already know the bird's neck could use some improvement, unfortunately I cannot find the original photos.

To me it suggests the flightless bird seen in the B.C. comics.

And the dialog as noted in the link below, "dougie_monty" submission. At the moment, I feel like the dinosaur (off camera). :SM02:

https://boards.straightdope.com/sdmb/archive/index.php/t-18240.html

Several other lines come to mind, as well.

"It's my new tail wig I got on E-bay. How do you like it?"

"Hey, don't knock him. He's my big brother."

"My best bud is on the Paleo bark diet."

To get the full effect, I would brighten the bird's left eye.

I find the shot very humorous.

AzPicLady Loc: Behind the camera!

I have to say I don't get a "story," but it is a cute, funny image. My personal likes call for darker images, so I would take the exposure down a bit - or at least in the sky.

Howard5252 Loc: New York / Florida (now)

Well, I seem to have failed on the story; maybe it's not a story at all.
The image is a worm's eye view of a situation.

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Howard5252 wrote:

Well, I seem to have failed on the story;
maybe it's not a story at all. The image
is a worm's eye view of a situation.

I wrote earlier that it has a sense of
something about to happen. Now we
are told that it's worm's eye view, of
this bird staring down at that worm,
or a bug or other live delicacy. So, it
really communicates approximately
what you intended. IOW, it's not an
action, it's a situation, preceding an
action. Thaz pretty much what I got
out of it ... that "sense of something
about to happen". So, GOOD JOB !

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Stephan G

Howard5252 wrote:

Well, I seem to have failed on the story; maybe it's not a story at all.
The image is a worm's eye view of a situation.

You have not "failed". You had a piece that defined the story you saw in your mind's eye. Others imagined their pieces fitting into your depiction and had their own stories. Stories are meant to be embellished by others.

Desert Gecko Loc: desert southwest, USA

As another said, the bird's left eye could be lightened. I also think the bird and palm are crowding a bit, that they should be a bit farther apart. Lastly, the palm should either be sharp or blurrier; it's just not quite OOF enough for proper effect, I think.

But overall very nice, and I wouldn't have noticed any of this (and certainly would not have opined) had you not asked for a critical look. Nice work.

Howard5252 Loc: New York / Florida (now)

Desert Gecko wrote:

As another said, the bird's left eye could be lightened. I also think the bird and palm are crowding a bit, that they should be a bit farther apart. Lastly, the palm should either be sharp or blurrier; it's just not quite OOF enough for proper effect, I think.

But overall very nice, and I wouldn't have noticed any of this (and certainly would not have opined) had you not asked for a critical look. Nice work.

Yes, I did ask for a critical look; thank you for your comments. The palm tree was blurred to what I thought the DOF would do under the circumstances. If it were in focus, it would fight with the bird for attention … to blurry and it might lose it's overall shape. I will consider your comments on my next attempt of this idea.

Country's Mama Loc: Michigan

Howard5252 wrote:

Yes, I did ask for a critical look; thank you for your comments. The palm tree was blurred to what I thought the DOF would do under the circumstances. If it were in focus, it would fight with the bird for attention … to blurry and it might lose it's overall shape. I will consider your comments on my next attempt of this idea.

The top of the palm tree would be blurred, but the trunk in the same focal plane should be just as sharp as your bird. If you want to tell the story of a worm and bird I think you need the nose of the worm in your photo.