CO wrote:
I like the full color version the best. I agree with the poster above about the vignette. I would not have the vignette intrude on their heads and faces. I would remove the vignette entirely before having it intrude on their heads and faces. The photo is cropped too tightly to have a vignette. You might post this also in the Professional and Advanced Portraiture section. Mr. Shapiro and CaptainC , who manage the section, give expert critique.
Thank you CO for the advice and tips. It's great to have other photographer's ideas.