Jennifer
May 26, 2014 21:13:43 #
greg vescuso
Loc: Ozark,Mo.
Took this shot in the garden on top of the waterfall, used one ex600rt with a shoot thru umbrella. For C&C. thanks for looking.
May 26, 2014 21:22:57 #
greg vescuso wrote:
Took this shot in the garden on top of the waterfall, used one ex600rt with a shoot thru umbrella. For C&C. thanks for looking.
Really like the light here. Nice use of the 600ex...
I only wish the light between the trees wasn't there.
May 26, 2014 21:30:58 #
Light on subject looks pretty nice. Agree about the gray sky, and her locked arm looks almost painful.
May 27, 2014 09:16:11 #
I don't mean to pick------but she does not look relaxed in this pose------A little too tense
I do like the setting with the rocks, but also agree on the light between the trees
I do like the setting with the rocks, but also agree on the light between the trees
May 27, 2014 10:37:19 #
Yup - that light between the trees is a killer and sensorloupe is right about the pose - she doesn't look relaxed at all.
May 27, 2014 13:19:50 #
Nice effort and a pretty subject and location.The first thing that jumps out at me with this image is the dislocated elbow on the weight bearing arm. The physiology of the elbow joint is different in women than in men and they lack the tendon support we have. As a result wheigh is posted on the arm with the fingers pointed back the joint slips forward creating the illusion of her elbow being dislocated. To counter this simply have her rotate her fingers toward the lens and bend the elbow ever so slightly and the natural look of the joint will return.
Now for some nit pick and suggestions since you have asked for C&C
The whole in the trees could probably be cloned out but the truth is it is always easier to change it before you activate the shutter if you can, Now granted I do not know what the landscape limitations you may have been dealing with but taking a couple steps to your left would have put all tree tops behind her.
There are a couple more aspects of the pose that are hurting this image. First she is very flat and square to the camera, if you took those 2 steps left and had her rotated her body so her feet were turned 20-30 degrees camera left you would introduce a great deal of depth and dimension to the image. Then have her turn her nose back to to the sun until the camera right side of her face becomes the short side this will short light her face,introduce a little bit of lighting ratio to model and slim the cheeks.
Now cross her right foot over the top of her left leg, rotate the hand around the back of the knee until just the fingertips are coming over the top, sit her up straighter (about 10 degree by rotating her fingertips to you and moving the arm in just a bit closer to the body.
Now most importantly of all make eye contact with her, engage her in conversation and thought until she is thinking about something fun, beautiful, exciting, happy whatever and when that natural smile comes to her face take the shot. Expression is so critical to an images success, when we settle for the subjects "Picture Smile" we will never get a relaxed looking expression. What drives expression is thought so ideally what is in a subjects head is on their face. If you can manipulate what she is thinking about by leading the conversation you can manipulate the expression to meet your needs.
Now for some nit pick and suggestions since you have asked for C&C
The whole in the trees could probably be cloned out but the truth is it is always easier to change it before you activate the shutter if you can, Now granted I do not know what the landscape limitations you may have been dealing with but taking a couple steps to your left would have put all tree tops behind her.
There are a couple more aspects of the pose that are hurting this image. First she is very flat and square to the camera, if you took those 2 steps left and had her rotated her body so her feet were turned 20-30 degrees camera left you would introduce a great deal of depth and dimension to the image. Then have her turn her nose back to to the sun until the camera right side of her face becomes the short side this will short light her face,introduce a little bit of lighting ratio to model and slim the cheeks.
Now cross her right foot over the top of her left leg, rotate the hand around the back of the knee until just the fingertips are coming over the top, sit her up straighter (about 10 degree by rotating her fingertips to you and moving the arm in just a bit closer to the body.
Now most importantly of all make eye contact with her, engage her in conversation and thought until she is thinking about something fun, beautiful, exciting, happy whatever and when that natural smile comes to her face take the shot. Expression is so critical to an images success, when we settle for the subjects "Picture Smile" we will never get a relaxed looking expression. What drives expression is thought so ideally what is in a subjects head is on their face. If you can manipulate what she is thinking about by leading the conversation you can manipulate the expression to meet your needs.
May 27, 2014 19:19:52 #
greg vescuso
Loc: Ozark,Mo.
Bobby Deal wrote:
Nice effort and a pretty subject and location.The ... (show quote)
I really appreciate how you explained turning her hand towards the lens to fix the locked and disjointed arm. I can not thank you,Russ and Cliff enough for the time you take to help me and others here on this site. This shot just happened for me and I should have taken more time with it when It was shot to correct all the problems with it. This is a shot of my middle daughter and I was making a 4 generation portrait of her sister when her grandmother wanted a picture of the two sister together so I told them to sit on top of the waterfall and my middle daughter went up and sat in this pose and I just had to shoot it.. I had nowhere to go to the left since my wife was holding the umbrella extended out over her head up against a tree. I think you have given me so much help her with every detail I'm going to reshoot this image with my daughter and take the time to fix all these issues. I sure would like to be a fly on the wall when Russ you and the others get together June. Thanks again for taking the time, Greg.
May 27, 2014 19:52:17 #
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