A Haiku
Nov 27, 2023 19:04:23 #
The breeze of the fall
The snap of winter is near
The snow shall soon fly
The snap of winter is near
The snow shall soon fly
Nov 27, 2023 19:27:41 #
Spirit Vision Photography wrote:
The breeze of the fall
The snap of winter is near
The snow shall soon fly
The snap of winter is near
The snow shall soon fly
Nov 27, 2023 19:59:26 #
Cany143
Loc: SE Utah
Not all haikus follow the (Westernly presumed) standard of a line-by-line arrangement of a '5-7-5' syllable count. Other forms follow different syllabic arrangements but stay true to a stated vision of a natural happening or of a momentary actuality in nature.
Rather as your image does.
suggestion: drop the 'The' in each line of your text, then provide the viewer (me) with a larger (downloadable) view that is either more detailed or has been made somehow slightly more abstracted. Do so and you'll have given us (me) a haiku that renders an actuality.
But don't alter that palette.
Rather as your image does.
suggestion: drop the 'The' in each line of your text, then provide the viewer (me) with a larger (downloadable) view that is either more detailed or has been made somehow slightly more abstracted. Do so and you'll have given us (me) a haiku that renders an actuality.
But don't alter that palette.
Nov 27, 2023 21:13:15 #
Nov 28, 2023 03:47:17 #
Spirit Vision Photography wrote:
The breeze of the fall
The snap of winter is near
The snow shall soon fly
The snap of winter is near
The snow shall soon fly
Nov 28, 2023 04:15:40 #
RodeoMan
Loc: St Joseph, Missouri
I also appreciate Haiku. Here is a one, author unknown, for these gray November days we find ourselves in.
"Gray moor, unmarred
By any path
A single branch
A bird - November"
Thank you for sharing your Haiku
"Gray moor, unmarred
By any path
A single branch
A bird - November"
Thank you for sharing your Haiku
Nov 28, 2023 05:51:08 #
Nov 28, 2023 10:51:47 #
Nov 28, 2023 11:15:53 #
Nov 28, 2023 14:43:29 #
RodeoMan
Loc: St Joseph, Missouri
Retired CPO wrote:
Birds on a branch
Fruit within reach
Sun rising
Sun arisen
Fruit within reach
Sun rising
Sun arisen
Thanks Chief. Was this yours?
Nov 28, 2023 15:21:47 #
Nov 28, 2023 16:43:57 #
RodeoMan wrote:
Thanks Chief. Was this yours?
Mine, took about thirty seconds to put together.
Nov 28, 2023 22:26:57 #
Dec 1, 2023 15:29:55 #
Spirit Vision Photography wrote:
The breeze of the fall
The snap of winter is near
The snow shall soon fly
The snap of winter is near
The snow shall soon fly
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