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Mar 4, 2014 01:50:51 #
I need an honest critique on this photo. All comments on this are welcome. This was shot from Pali highway over looking downtown Kaneohe Hawaii.
Mar 4, 2014 01:55:29 #
Are you able to use a cloning tool to mask the bright light, I think then the light in the clouds will be more prominent.
Mar 4, 2014 01:58:13 #
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Mar 4, 2014 02:14:52 #
What story do you want this image to tell?
If it's more about the clouds, then the framing probably is OK. If it's more about the overlook down to the city lights, and the mountain, I'd crop a small sliver off the right edge and a larger sliver (maybe 1/5 or 1/4 of the sky) from the top.
I'd also consider a crop of the left edge to remove the bright semi circle of light that's kind of close to that edge and pulls my eye that way. And consider a tiny crop off the bottom to remove those partial leaves way left center at the bottom.
Either way, I like it - just depends which is your intended focal point of the image.
If it's more about the clouds, then the framing probably is OK. If it's more about the overlook down to the city lights, and the mountain, I'd crop a small sliver off the right edge and a larger sliver (maybe 1/5 or 1/4 of the sky) from the top.
I'd also consider a crop of the left edge to remove the bright semi circle of light that's kind of close to that edge and pulls my eye that way. And consider a tiny crop off the bottom to remove those partial leaves way left center at the bottom.
Either way, I like it - just depends which is your intended focal point of the image.
Mar 4, 2014 02:28:16 #
Allen Hirsch wrote:
What story do you want this image to tell? br br ... (show quote)
It was meant to be a scenic scene and I would agree with the various light sources drawing away from the main scene. As nice as it is I still feel like it is missing something but I cant put my finger on it. It could just be all the small "distractions" that you pointed out that are degrading the overall quality of the picture.
Mar 4, 2014 03:41:19 #
personally, i find the brightly lit bush in the foreground distracting... it's too bright, and my eye keeps getting pulled to that corner, which is not where the picture is. if you can tone that down so it doesn't overpower the rest of the photo, that'd help. next time, perhaps step to the left and leave it out entirely, or include a lot less of it, since it takes up too much of the image.
Mar 4, 2014 04:06:12 #
I agree with Caro on the bright light!
dwdickinson wrote:
I need an honest critique on this photo. All comments on this are welcome. This was shot from Pali highway over looking downtown Kaneohe Hawaii.
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Mar 4, 2014 05:31:08 #
Its. Hawaii .. The Aloha State, The Garden State... The bush and the light should stay! Perfect, to me, it just shows we do not have too many bright lights, in any town and in real life here that is what is making the cloud bright?
Also I'm a plant and flower kinda gal!!
Aloha Nui,
Hokulea
Also I'm a plant and flower kinda gal!!
Aloha Nui,
Hokulea
Mar 4, 2014 06:28:35 #
If your object is the overlook to the city, I'd move my logo to the right, in the bush's leaves. That way it doesn't compete with the city and it's lights.
Mar 4, 2014 07:38:25 #
I see two areas of concern. I think the bush used to frame the scene is distracting because the lighting on the bush does not match the lighting in the valley. I would try to tone it down and crop out part of it. I also would try to burn the bright lights. I understand that they are part of the environment; but this photo is more about esthetics than about accurate documentation. My eye goes immediately to those bright lights and they take away from the scene. Additionally, I would like to see some more detail in the valley. I know it is night time; but a majority of the scene is pure black. The sky is fantastic. I like this photo and think it has lots of potential.
Mar 4, 2014 09:00:42 #
I agree with ebrunner and others about the bush and the light. I love how you got an interesting sky and made it a large part of the composition. If you could have moved more to the left and set the focus on the distant scene, it would be a winner for me :)
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Mar 4, 2014 19:06:49 #
Thank you all for your comments and critiques. It was what I needed. As soon as I can I will take it back to the darkroom. You all were very helpful.
Mar 5, 2014 06:50:55 #
Linda From Maine wrote:
I agree with ebrunner and others about the bush and the light. I love how you got an interesting sky and made it a large part of the composition. If you could have moved more to the left and set the focus on the distant scene, it would be a winner for me :)
I agree - it's a flash exposure on the bush, and it looks very odd with the (IMO) really good sunset exposure of the rest of the image.
Mar 5, 2014 09:40:52 #
Mar 5, 2014 12:06:35 #
dwdickinson wrote:
I need an honest critique on this photo. All comments on this are welcome. This was shot from Pali highway over looking downtown Kaneohe Hawaii.
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