JoeV wrote:
Love the gentle coloring and atmospheric perspective. Beautiful verse from a grand hymn. Something to consider...it would be more comfortable for me if you broke the lines up in more natural places. For instance, the "I" at the end of the line would go better at the beginning of the next line, don't you think? And so on.
You didn't ask for critique, so I hope not to offend.
Thanks JoeV, glad you liked the coloring,etc. and my hymn choice. I don't mind suggestions, they are helpful. :-) Glad you looked in,too.