Here's my stab at it. Re-sized and added some contrast and other things. Her jacket is too blow out to do much with, I toned it down as much without looking fake.
jimmya wrote:
One thing you might try is bumping up the contrast in the camera. I've done this on all my Canon dslr cameras and it really makes a difference.
Great advice! Contrast makes all the flat, out of camera pictures roar!
I think it looks good with the shadows. You can soften the shadows in post if you think they're too harsh. But I like your shot with the shadows. Nice job!
longmg, I think you have some good images to work with in lightroom. They might not be as sharp as you want, but you can make up for a lot of that in LR.
For white balance correction, you can often use the dropper and take a sample of the picture that is supposed to be pure white, which will then correct the entire scene.
Also try spot metering on white birds, since they are a tad overexposed. Use some radial filters or an exposure brush to in LR to correct the overexposure.
You can get rid of the beards on both swans with spot removal, combination of heal and clone, although photoshop might do a better job. LR is good enough though.
This is about what I'm thinking
This is a great site, so glad I joined! I've been shooting DSLR for about 5 years now. I just upgraded to full frame, hence my user name ;) I got a black friday deal on a 5DM3 that I just couldn't pass up. A big upgrade from my 7D!
Here's my try in LR5.7.
One trick for people pop, or any pop for that matter, is to go all the way to the bottom of the develop module to the Blue Primary "Saturation" slider. Move it to the right until desired "pop" is achieved.
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