Haiga (haiku with photographic images) (Page 2): Well I might as well give it a shot also. While driving from Knoxville to Little Rock thinking of about the photograph I had taken the...

dave sproul Loc: Tucson AZ

Well I might as well give it a shot also.

While driving from Knoxville to Little Rock thinking of about the photograph I had taken the previous week, I developed the following.

It is my first venture into poetry/ hiaku/ etc. Please provide me feed back so I can further develop my abilities.

Thank you for your comments -- the good, the bad and the ugly -- all are appreciated.

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Frank2013 Loc: San Antonio, TX. & Milwaukee, WI.

Nice and an outstanding photo Dave. Welcome to the section.

minniev Loc: MIssissippi

dave sproul wrote:

Well I might as well give it a shot also.

While driving from Knoxville to Little Rock thinking of about the photograph I had taken the previous week, I developed the following.

It is my first venture into poetry/ hiaku/ etc. Please provide me feed back so I can further develop my abilities.

Thank you for your comments -- the good, the bad and the ugly -- all are appreciated.

Welcome, and kudos for being brave enough to share your first effort! I can't critique it, much less write my own but I'm intrigued with what Dave and others have been doing with this beautiful and deceptively simple genre of poetry, and how they've been mixing it with visual art. Such discussions have a grand home here, where "anything art" is the section identifier.

I never cared much about autumn till I (a) got into photography and (b) got old. Now I don't know how I could have missed its magic all this time.

Jump in, make yourself at home here, and offer your ideas on our variety of interesting threads, none of which will mention what kind of gear to buy!

Uuglypher Loc: South Dakota (East River)

dave sproul wrote:

Well I might as well give it a shot also.

While driving from Knoxville to Little Rock thinking of about the photograph I had taken the previous week, I developed the following.

It is my first venture into poetry/ hiaku/ etc. Please provide me feed back so I can further develop my abilities.

Thank you for your comments -- the good, the bad and the ugly -- all are appreciated.

Hi, Dave,
Welcome to the section!
You've certainly made a good "first venture " with a lovely image and an appropriately complementary poem. Although many (but NOT all) haiku writers pointedly avoid rhyme, it certainly works with this one.
Keep at it, Dave, and by all means let us see more.

Dave in SD

Uuglypher Loc: South Dakota (East River)

Just F.Y.I.
Severall new Haiga have been posted in the "Links and Resources" section

http://www.uglyhedgehog.com/t-347137-1.html

Dave

Uuglypher Loc: South Dakota (East River)

A new Haiga from Jenny (her Explorer went on the Fritz so I'm the middleman...)

So note: Jenny is the author of this Haiga.

Indian Summer

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jenny Loc: in hiding:)

Dave ....And here is where you posted that stunning picture of the burning logs and its perfect match in the depth of your contemplative thoughts recorded in the Haiga. This one I see in my mind enlarged, placed low in some space within a bookcase perhaps, a smokeless cozy fire not requiring any replenishment of logs, it would keep me warm all winter.

jenny Loc: in hiding:)

Uuglypher wrote:

A new Haiga from Jenny (her Explorer went on the Fritz so I'm the middleman...)

So note: Jenny is the author of this Haiga.

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Thank you...profusely!...for your help Dave, as you tend to your own painful and in convenient recovery! How I may long for "leisure time" one moment is balanced immediately by remembering by what means we may get "time off", and that we should all be careful what we wish for. You use it well here. Speedy recovery!

jenny Loc: in hiding:)

Jim Hill...."Moon Over Mailboxes", huh? Now where would you get an idea such as that?? Love it!! Better than ,hahaha, whatever inspired you! :) :) :) :) :)

jim hill Loc: Springfield, IL

jenny wrote:

Jim Hill...."Moon Over Mailboxes", huh? Now where would you get an idea such as that?? Love it!! Better than ,hahaha, whatever inspired you! :) :) :) :) :)

Thanks Jenny, I have no idea what makes any idea come to this old man's pickled brain except a need to do it.

There's a photograph
Desiring a small haiku:
Etching a Blue Moon.

Just occurred to me.