jonsommer wrote:
Hi Mark, like the others have said, there's an awful lot to like here as these are photos that let us know something personal about the model even though we've never met her. But, of course, almost everything could always be improved and because you have nailed all the technical aspects of these photos, I have a couple of emotional type observations to make: in the first photo the crop feels wrong to me, I understand the rule of thirds and all, but a crop that included her camera right shoulder and then if you added some background to camera left you would still be able to do a rule of thirds kind of crop and not cut off her shoulder - also, I wonder if she is a fellow body builder with huge tricepts on her camera left arm, either that or she has a huge welt on that arm - or something which doesn't look quite natural to my eyes. For the second photo, the wonderful personal intimacy of the first photo is lost by her looking away from the camera, so for me the personal connection is lost as her intense blue eyes are looking somewhere else other than at me.
Hi Mark, like the others have said, there's an awf... (
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Hey Jon, I was hoping to be the beneficiary of your expertise.
The reason for the crop was due to body size and the way Aeon was sitting which really was not the most flattering. This young woman is stunning but by her own self confession, due to a long illness with lime disease, she had put on a little more weight than she desired. Not that there is anything wrong with photographing females that do not fit into that "slim" category and in fact I have a lot more photos yet to be processed with this in mind.
The BW was shot with a fine art nudity concept in mind where the model is not always engaged with the camera but I do concede a certain connectivity is lost in the translation. So much so that after reading your comments I had a look through the portfolio and was disappointed to find that I had instructed the model to pose this way for all the other shots in this set.
I shall post some more pictures where Aeon does engage the viewer.
Your comments and critiquing are always very welcomed Jon and I know that I learn from your honest opinion, thank you my friend.