More Still Life stuff part 3
Feb 17, 2013 16:17:23 #
there are 3 variations of the same thing; interested on what is right or wrong, what you like or hate. Is there a preference...whatever.
Feb 17, 2013 16:19:01 #
Feb 17, 2013 16:30:06 #
i like both 2 and 3 a lot, tho the bottles clearly something 'staged', i can't imagine anyone writing a letter with those bottles where they are...so it's a little off-putting for me. But not sure if would have same feel if you backed them up more (behind photo on lower level?) or put them on upper shelf?
As someone who had a voluminous correspondence in my youth these shots speak to me, however.
As someone who had a voluminous correspondence in my youth these shots speak to me, however.
Feb 17, 2013 18:17:02 #
Feb 17, 2013 19:23:14 #
Feb 17, 2013 22:27:54 #
I like the colors in three. The paper is just right. It does not jump out at you. Very nice!
Erv
Erv
Feb 18, 2013 09:01:08 #
Feb 18, 2013 11:28:19 #
Erv wrote:
I like the colors in three. The paper is just right. It does not jump out at you. Very nice!
Erv
Erv
I agree with Erv. I love the moodiness of this, and the fact that it seems to tell a story.
Feb 18, 2013 11:51:42 #
You're on the right track.
Maybe open up the shadows a bit more and darken the page.
Regardless, the mood is really nice.
Maybe open up the shadows a bit more and darken the page.
Regardless, the mood is really nice.
Feb 18, 2013 11:57:32 #
Here are my thoughts.
The shots are not "dumbed down" enough for me....what is the subject? Where do you want me to look?
You direct a person's eyes by how you light the scene, the lightest parts get the attention; the envelopes on the right distract as does the light wood on the upper right.
Second, the pen..it seems out of place, it's modern but the scene seems antique...not sure.
Third, I can't read what's written so it bothers me...that might be just my poor eye sight.
My suggestion is this...light the scene more specifically with smaller lights to direct my eye to what you want.
Take out anything that isn't there for a reason, and then find a really good angle to show the rest.
For a textbook lesson on this see just about any post by Ian (the black and white egg guy) Not sure of his last name.
The shots are not "dumbed down" enough for me....what is the subject? Where do you want me to look?
You direct a person's eyes by how you light the scene, the lightest parts get the attention; the envelopes on the right distract as does the light wood on the upper right.
Second, the pen..it seems out of place, it's modern but the scene seems antique...not sure.
Third, I can't read what's written so it bothers me...that might be just my poor eye sight.
My suggestion is this...light the scene more specifically with smaller lights to direct my eye to what you want.
Take out anything that isn't there for a reason, and then find a really good angle to show the rest.
For a textbook lesson on this see just about any post by Ian (the black and white egg guy) Not sure of his last name.
Feb 18, 2013 12:26:32 #
gschekel
Loc: Salt Lake City, Ut area
I'm not qualified to give you what is right or wrong, just know what I like. No. 2 looks like an old time photo except for the pen, still like it. No. 1 is nice, subtle colors, great job!
Feb 18, 2013 14:02:23 #
Very pretty, Carlysue. My favorite is the 3rd. I love the antique look of the sepia tint and lighting.
carlysue wrote:
there are 3 variations of the same thing; interested on what is right or wrong, what you like or hate. Is there a preference...whatever.
Feb 18, 2013 16:28:54 #
#1 holds the eye in better. 2 & 3 have the book or envelopes falling out of the frame. would prefer more light.
Feb 18, 2013 19:41:23 #
angler wrote:
Good set but number 3 for me.
Angler, thank you for looking and commenting. I appreciate that.
Feb 18, 2013 19:44:57 #
feywon wrote:
i like both 2 and 3 a lot, tho the bottles clearly something 'staged', i can't imagine anyone writing a letter with those bottles where they are...so it's a little off-putting for me. But not sure if would have same feel if you backed them up more (behind photo on lower level?) or put them on upper shelf?
As someone who had a voluminous correspondence in my youth these shots speak to me, however.
As someone who had a voluminous correspondence in my youth these shots speak to me, however.
Thank you for commenting. I appreciate your thoughts. It is a fountain pen and the blue bottle was supposed to be an ink bottle but I can't remember when I might have used a pen that you had to actually fill or dip the tip in ink so you are right, I should have put that where it would be used.
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