First attempt at shooting a live model (Page 2): What a great start! I am looking for a sharp eye in some of them and not finding it. Put that AF point right on her near eye and fire...

Ernie Misner Loc: Lakewood, WA

What a great start! I am looking for a sharp eye in some of them and not finding it. Put that AF point right on her near eye and fire without recomposing. Looking at the first shot her eye appears to be back focused. The hair is sharp which is nearer to the camera.

ronz Loc: Florida

Well a good effort and I applaud you. This may be more suited for a cycle magazine which there is nothing wrong with that. I have shot a few for one of those and sought out the perfect gal for it and soon found it rounded out the shoot with a similar guy in the shots. There is definitely a good time for tats so find that place and utilize it. Sorry but I wasn't excited about the lighting, I felt you had some opportunities to showcase but thought it never quite made it. One of the things I still do is pick up several current magazines with shoots by some of the photographers I respect and use their ideas or part of them. I did think a couple of the shots hit pretty close on lighting but feel less may have been more in some of the shots producing a slightly more provocative look since you were bringing out so much of the tats. I applaud you for starting down the road to where you want to go. Don't be discouraged and "keep on keepin on." Your mind will bring you new ideas every time you sit down and look at what you shot.

Donkas1946 Loc: Southern NH

luvmypets wrote:

I really like 2,7,8,9. I know that tattoos are all the rage today and have seen some really awesome ones but I really think they are a distraction. She is very pretty but that tattoo across her chest isn't. Number 9 would probably be the only photo I would be happy with since it shows very little of her tattoo. JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION.

Sorry, the tattoos are too distracting, find a new model.

Julian Loc: Sarasota, FL

I still believe that "a tattoo on a beautiful woman is like a bumper sticker on a Ferrari"; nevertheless, your first attempt is commendable: good use of lighting and great posing. Your last two images are my favorites.

Rich2236 Loc: E. Hampstead, New Hampshire

For a first timer, I think you did very well. But you are looking for an honest critique...Ok. First, I am looking beyond the tats, your poses are not bad at all. I love natural lighting, except, on most of your images, I would have used a white or light grey board set back just to lighten up the dark shadows which would soften the dark areas and would blend the light and shadow areas better.
Rich...

camerapapi Loc: Miami, Fl.

Good series. Why young, beautiful women fill their bodies with tattoos is beyond my understanding.

Don, the 2nd son Loc: Crowded Florida

Ernie Misner wrote:

What a great start! I am looking for a sharp eye in some of them and not finding it. Put that AF point right on her near eye and fire without recomposing. Looking at the first shot her eye appears to be back focused. The hair is sharp which is nearer to the camera.

Always looking for sharpness on the eye/eyes. Great start overall.

Phil Martin Loc: New Hampshire

I think you've done the best you could with a not-so-attractive young model.

ggab Loc: ?

luvmypets wrote:

I really like 2,7,8,9. I know that tattoos are all the rage today and have seen some really awesome ones but I really think they are a distraction. She is very pretty but that tattoo across her chest isn't. Number 9 would probably be the only photo I would be happy with since it shows very little of her tattoo. JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION.

ggab Loc: ?

camerapapi wrote:

Good series. Why young, beautiful women fill their bodies with tattoos is beyond my understanding.

Glenn Harve

broncomaniac wrote:

What an offensive post.

An honest critique was asked for and recieved. True, he could have skipped the trailer park, but hey, apparrently he judges people.

Rab-Eye Loc: Indiana

christographer wrote:

I've always been a landscape kind of guy with some... (show quote)

I’m certainly no pro, but I would be proud of this series.

phlash46 Loc: Westchester County, New York

suntouched Loc: Sierra Vista AZ

Good first effort. I think lighting and focus could be improved upon for your next engagement if you are going to continue doing portraits. The BW image is the most appealing to me followed by the model on that great sofa- that one has the best exposure and focus although the composition/crop is a bit awkward. Some of the backgrounds get in the way.

broncomaniac Loc: Lynchburg, VA

Glenn Harve wrote:

An honest critique was asked for and recieved. True, he could have skipped the trailer park, but hey, apparrently he judges people.

Yes, he could have, along with the suggestion of dressing her in Daisy Dukes and a crop top. I, too, found the suggestion to be judgemental of the young lady. You can't judge a book by its cover.

For the record, I have relatives and loved ones who own trailers.