Sisterhood: These sisters were a joy to shoot. They goofed off and had a good time with it, but this serious one is one of my favorites. I shot this in my dining room using a white...

LLucas Loc: Upstate South Carolina, USA

These sisters were a joy to shoot. They goofed off and had a good time with it, but this serious one is one of my favorites.
I shot this in my dining room using a white back drop and umbrella lights.
After seeing this on a different monitor, I think I'll revisit and do some corrections on the skin, etc. And it looks OOF!
Man, just when you think you have it figured out...

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roxiemarty Loc: Florida

The focus seems off to me, unless you were going for soft focus. Otherwise good sisters portrait!

dsp Loc: Denver, Colorado

I agree, the focus is slightly off and your key light may have been a little hot on the younger sister's cheek. Too, the shot would benefit from using a different aspect ratio -- particularly as an 8x10. That way, you could eliminate a lot of extraneous information that is not needed or necessary. e.g. knees, torn jeans, etc.

A little PP could make this into a real keeper!

Hmmmm . . . I presumed to do a little PP myself just to see if what I was saying had any value. So, here it is . . . not necessarily completed but it gives you the idea. Pardon me if I've over-stepped any boundaries.

dnathan

A suggestion: "never" show the back of a woman's hand. It mahes it too broad. If you tuck her thumb into the paln of the girl with the hat and bend her wrist back, the hand will look feminine and much smaller.

fuminous Loc: Luling, LA... for now...

dnathan wrote:

A suggestion: "never" show the back of a woman's hand. It mahes it too broad. If you tuck her thumb into the paln of the girl with the hat and bend her wrist back, the hand will look feminine and much smaller.

Yup, the broadness of the hand competes pretty hard with faces - smaller would have been good but toned down a tad would help. Expressions are very good- nice portrait-

LLucas Loc: Upstate South Carolina, USA

dnathan wrote:

A suggestion: "never" show the back of a woman's hand. It mahes it too broad. If you tuck her thumb into the paln of the girl with the hat and bend her wrist back, the hand will look feminine and much smaller.

That's a great suggestion, thank you.

LLucas Loc: Upstate South Carolina, USA

DSP, thanks for the comments. I didn't realize how soft the image was until seeing it so large on this monitor. I hope to revisit this project next time the older sister is home from college. I think they're just adorable together.

alissaspieces Loc: New York

I struggle often with the same thing..especially when I shoot in natural light. And sometimes on a small screen it looks great and then larger I realize. But it's a very nice image and you captured emotion..which is excellent. Hope you get a redo.

LLucas wrote:

DSP, thanks for the comments. I didn't realize how soft the image was until seeing it so large on this monitor. I hope to revisit this project next time the older sister is home from college. I think they're just adorable together.

LLucas Loc: Upstate South Carolina, USA

alissaspieces wrote:

I struggle often with the same thing..especially when I shoot in natural light. And sometimes on a small screen it looks great and then larger I realize. But it's a very nice image and you captured emotion..which is excellent. Hope you get a redo.

Thank you! These two are full of emotion. Great subjects, for sure.

bkyser Loc: Fly over country in Indiana

DSP's version looks a little sharper. I agree with Alissa, the emotion is what sells the image. No cheesy smiles or forced looking expressions.