Would love a critique on this study in shadow and light
Jan 13, 2019 11:31:02 #
RickH wrote:
New camera -- Fujifilm XT3 -- and it is taking awhile to learn.
Here's the first result I'm reasonably pleases with!
I welcome CC
Here's the first result I'm reasonably pleases with!
I welcome CC
I like it a lot. I found my eyes going to the white hat in the back and wondering what was below it.
Jan 13, 2019 12:09:51 #
fergmark wrote:
This is quite a fascinating image. Part of me wants to crop into the negative space, to recompose the island of geometry, but the woman seems to be unwilling to be more prominently featured. I think you made a good decision. I like it a lot!
Interesting comment! The original has a LOT MORE black space on the left; I wanted to leave a significant amount but still frame the woman off centre. I also brought the exposure down on the far right where, originally, a second figure distracted from the capped woman.
Jan 13, 2019 12:10:46 #
Jan 13, 2019 13:06:42 #
Those who critique in our camera club tend to like a little information in the dark shadow areas. I personally like the contrast between the dark and light as it gives *(at least to me) a more dramatic visual and keeps me interested in the image longer. I like your composition and how you've cropped this image. Nice job. Bev
Jan 13, 2019 14:29:17 #
I like this a lot especially the black and white. The shadows opening up to show the one person in the foreground and what looks like another person toward the back, the leading line which we can follow toward where you want us to go next. Really well done in my opinion.
Dennis
Dennis
Jan 13, 2019 16:10:45 #
Visually striking, excellent use of B&W areas, bold graphics, Great sharpness (See the persons image and the texture of the background immediately behind them.) This is an image that caught my eye and caused me to study the photo. What story were you trying to tell with your photo? Do you think that your story comes across? What might you have done in order to better realize your previsualization?
See my posting under the topic "Why are photographers so mean?" (several topics above). I might have cropped a bit differently to move the subject off center but it's not my photo nor my previsualization.
Try cropping off the right until you just lose the white cylindrical object that is laying on the ledge to see if that works for you. Centering the subject is usually static and placid and peaceful yet the strong diagonal lines and sharp hard corners create a palpable tension. Was that your intended feeling to engender?
See my posting under the topic "Why are photographers so mean?" (several topics above). I might have cropped a bit differently to move the subject off center but it's not my photo nor my previsualization.
Try cropping off the right until you just lose the white cylindrical object that is laying on the ledge to see if that works for you. Centering the subject is usually static and placid and peaceful yet the strong diagonal lines and sharp hard corners create a palpable tension. Was that your intended feeling to engender?
Jan 13, 2019 16:33:57 #
I like it a lot! My one comment for improvement would be to tone down the highlight to the left of the subject. It is the brightest highlight in the image and keeps pulling my eye away.
Jan 31, 2019 19:03:18 #
Yes, it's very striking. I love the stripes of shadow and light. The subject is lit very effectively. Good work.
Apr 24, 2020 11:03:00 #
flyboy61
Loc: The Great American Desert
Excellent photo! Your leading lines guide the eye to the subject, but there is a too bit much darkness. I'd suggest cropping the left to the outer edge of the bright triangle, and the bottom to the bottom of the closest light area.
Apr 24, 2020 15:21:04 #
RickH wrote:
New camera -- Fujifilm XT3 -- and it is taking awhile to learn.
Here's the first result I'm reasonably pleases with!
I welcome CC
Here's the first result I'm reasonably pleases with!
I welcome CC
And rightly pleased you well ought be!
This is an extremely well contrived composition based upon numerous horizontal and angled geometric linear intersections (these, alone are marvelous compositional elements) and then the solitary intrusion of the organic outline of the person is the perfect non-geometric intrusion that adds to the complexities facing the viewer trying to reconcile it all into a coherent, comprehensible reality... indeed the surreality of your image is its consummate impact!
Definitely a memorable image!
Well done, Rick!
Apr 27, 2020 11:47:23 #
May 2, 2020 09:20:23 #
Electric Gnome
Loc: Norwich UK
Just a lovely image and I love the composition, it's just perfect for me.
May 23, 2020 18:37:04 #
fergmark wrote:
This is quite a fascinating image. Part of me wants to crop into the negative space, to recompose the island of geometry, but the woman seems to be unwilling to be more prominently featured. I think you made a good decision. I like it a lot!
I’m also thinking to give up some of all that emptiness. Not even half of it, but almost. There’s many possible new ways to rebalance the visual masses and yet still maintain the effect.
May 23, 2020 18:44:31 #
Others talking of geometric shapes and of leading lines. Such distracting “analysis”. I see only wholistic things. There’s only a Sea of Darkness, a Vessel of Light, and its solitary Occupant.
May 26, 2020 22:10:25 #
LindaBowers
Loc: Hilton, NY
RickH wrote:
New camera -- Fujifilm XT3 -- and it is taking awhile to learn.
Here's the first result I'm reasonably pleases with!
I welcome CC
Here's the first result I'm reasonably pleases with!
I welcome CC
I love the contrast and the way the sunlight spotlights the intent thoughtfulness of the woman.
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