Driftwood Beach
May 5, 2022 09:52:02 #
May 5, 2022 10:24:28 #
katatl wrote:
This young lady walked into my frame. Comments?
This is certainly an intriguing image. Well done. I see two competing stories, each worthy of its own display. Still trying to find my reaction to the juxtaposition of the two tales but I really like the picture.
[Minor nit: I would straighten the horizon...]
May 5, 2022 10:36:07 #
I would have waited until the people were out of the frame. Or, as insinuated, she walked into the frame, I'd have re-photographed the scene after she was clear of the camera's field of view. Oh, and as mentioned, be cognizant of your horizon line.
--Bob
--Bob
katatl wrote:
This young lady walked into my frame. Comments?
May 6, 2022 07:35:24 #
May 6, 2022 07:42:05 #
Immediately thought of a b&w treatment with the little girl in color. Don’t know if it would work, but that’s where my mind went. Still tells two stories, but emphasizes one.
May 6, 2022 08:09:10 #
Interesting story here, one we must make up from the parts you have provided. My interpretation:
She is approaching you katatl, the photographer, for the quarter you promised her, obvious by her extended palm-up hand. Tragic, we know she will be eaten by the beach monster lower-left before she gets to you.
The composition of the photo is diagonal lines... The girl, grandfather, and the tip of the branch above him being less obvious. If we were to crop to the girl and the root wad there is a good contrast of bright and dark.
If the photo is by chance, then you are very lucky katatl, really sticking great story photo.
She is approaching you katatl, the photographer, for the quarter you promised her, obvious by her extended palm-up hand. Tragic, we know she will be eaten by the beach monster lower-left before she gets to you.
The composition of the photo is diagonal lines... The girl, grandfather, and the tip of the branch above him being less obvious. If we were to crop to the girl and the root wad there is a good contrast of bright and dark.
If the photo is by chance, then you are very lucky katatl, really sticking great story photo.
May 6, 2022 08:12:21 #
For me, it’s much better photo without the girl; she sort of invades the shoot. And, straighten that horizon line.
May 6, 2022 08:13:20 #
katatl wrote:
This young lady walked into my frame. Comments?
After straightening the horizon.
Alternative titles:
"The intersection of the two dreamers"
"Carrying off the invisible driftwood"
"Caught my drift"
Sometimes, it is good to walk away from a shot. Then come back and treat it as a Rorschach image to see what your mind has caught.
What locks the image in, actually, is the expression and stance of the young girl. Put this shot into your reference folder for future use in working up images. Use it to write a short story.
May 6, 2022 18:42:59 #
May 6, 2022 23:50:52 #
I like the little girl but not the guy in the back, not the downward part of the branch above his head. The latter is fine if he goes. If he stays, I'd remove the branch.
May 7, 2022 03:44:16 #
katatl wrote:
This young lady walked into my frame. Comments?
Well here is your pic with what the critiquers have said - IMHO, apart from the horizon, better as was. I think the young lady was showing you a tiny crab.
May 7, 2022 10:35:16 #
katatl wrote:
This young lady walked into my frame. Comments?
Make cuts to focus on the girl's face and her smile. It is a delicious capture.
May 7, 2022 13:31:29 #
Stephan G wrote:
Make cuts to focus on the girl's face and her smile. It is a delicious capture.
I absolutely agree with you
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