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Nov 6, 2018 14:11:43   #
photogeneralist Loc: Lopez Island Washington State
 
This month's assignment for my photo club is to take a photo composition with two focal points where the second focal point complements and reinforces the main subject. II found this ferryboat under repair in a shipyard in Anacortes WA. The propeller is the main focal point but does the rudder shaft tube weldment above the propeller adequately serve as a secondary focal point?


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Nov 6, 2018 14:37:48   #
rmalarz Loc: Tempe, Arizona
 
My first thought at looking at this photograph was a steampunk blimp. The propeller for propulsion and the small intrusion at the top of the photo was the control cockpit. So, even though I was completely incorrect as to what the photo featured, there wasn't enough to do more than hint.

That said, it's an interesting photograph and I learned something additional to the underside of ships.
--Bob
photogeneralist wrote:
This month's assignment for my photo club is to take a photo composition with two focal points where the second focal point complements and reinforces the main subject. II found this ferryboat under repair in a shipyard in Anacortes WA. The propeller is the main focal point but does the rudder shaft tube weldment above the propeller adequately serve as a secondary focal point?

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Nov 6, 2018 19:36:32   #
CHG_CANON Loc: the Windy City
 
I think the blur / color blotch on the right side of the image is the 2nd point of interest, and probably not what you intended ....

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Nov 7, 2018 08:31:20   #
OnDSnap Loc: NE New Jersey
 
Yeah, I too thought it was a blimp even thought the prop is to big. Certainly the main subject. As far as the secondary...I had to hunt for the rudder and would agree with CHG the rusted area. So to answer your question, No.

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Nov 7, 2018 09:02:01   #
fuminous Loc: Luling, LA... for now...
 
I see four things (plus alot of visual clutter): propeller- an excellent and strong star of the stage, two hoist chains and the rudder-shaft-tube, each reciting their lines but in a different play. There's no connection between any of them; all are separate by color, texture, shape and location.

I'd suggest cloning out the chains and enhance the propeller drive guide- or whatever that triangular shape thingy is called that houses and streamlines the propeller shaft- to stand out against the dark of the hull... and remove everything else, leaving just the propeller and the drive-guide against a backdrop of hull... just an idea...

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Nov 7, 2018 09:59:04   #
fergmark Loc: norwalk connecticut
 
I think the left side works well. The right side not so much. The excessive clutter at the bottom is very distracting. The chain on the right could be the secondary focal point, but should be hanging vertically. The object at the top wants too much attention. Were it mine I would straighten and crop it square, inside the blotch on the right, halfway between the left side chain and the prop, and up leaving the tips of the handrail loops which I would then clone out, leaving about half of the cockpit object at the top. It could benefit from a bit more contrast also

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Nov 8, 2018 18:30:56   #
Heather Iles Loc: UK, Somerset
 
photogeneralist wrote:
This month's assignment for my photo club is to take a photo composition with two focal points where the second focal point complements and reinforces the main subject. II found this ferryboat under repair in a shipyard in Anacortes WA. The propeller is the main focal point but does the rudder shaft tube weldment above the propeller adequately serve as a secondary focal point?


Speaking from experience, the Judge will not be complementary as there is too much going on in the photo and the lighting is not very good. If it is not too late, perhaps you could find another photo unless you want the Judge to tell you what you already know. No offence meant, just my thoughts.

I like the propeller on its own. It is sharp and shows a lot of detail.

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Nov 11, 2018 21:15:01   #
10MPlayer Loc: California
 
I'd say no. My eye was drawn to the blue lift cage on the right. There's a lot going on in the picture. I'm blanking out on the term right now but perhaps darkening the parts that aren't important to highlight the important parts would help draw the eye to the subject/s.

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Nov 19, 2018 21:16:44   #
canadaboy
 
I have to say nope sorry you did not achieve your goal. You complicated a simple task. Back to the drawing board for you!

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Nov 19, 2018 21:16:45   #
canadaboy
 
I have to say nope sorry you did not achieve your goal. You complicated a simple task. Back to the drawing board for you!

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Nov 20, 2018 20:38:43   #
via the lens Loc: Northern California, near Yosemite NP
 
photogeneralist wrote:
This month's assignment for my photo club is to take a photo composition with two focal points where the second focal point complements and reinforces the main subject. II found this ferryboat under repair in a shipyard in Anacortes WA. The propeller is the main focal point but does the rudder shaft tube weldment above the propeller adequately serve as a secondary focal point?



I don't think you have accomplished the set goal. You might consider seeking out a much less complex image for your assignment.

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